Some critique please

Discussion in 'Street and Documentary' started by Ghosthunter, Mar 1, 2015.

  1. I'm not sure if these 2 images work. I like them....I think. They kinda work in a way and it's a bit different from the usual street thing. They were taken on the Panasonic LF1 which adds the the roughness of the images. What do you think?

    16493462010_ba930e6180_b.jpg Eat and surf by andywest1, on Flickr

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  2. gryphon1911

    gryphon1911 Top Veteran

    Feb 6, 2015
    Central Ohio, USA
    On the first image I would crop out the chairs at the bottom.
    The seconf image I would crop out the half sign to the left. That would isolate the subject better.

    Also, popped over to your Flickr and you got some good stuff over there! :D
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  3. Thanks Andrew, much appreciated :)

    I have now edited the above images and I must say they are far better now. They make more sense :D

    Many thanks
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  4. Ray Sachs

    Ray Sachs Legend

    Sep 21, 2010
    Not too far from Philly
    you should be able to figure it out...
    I like the first one a lot Andy. As is - I wouldn't touch it. The second one doesn't do a lot for me and I don't think editing it would make a lot of difference, but I'd probably try cropping it into a vertical shot that just contains the woman and the sign below, without so much empty space to the left and right...

    As much as I like this first one, you've got some incredible architectural and landscape shots all around these two in your flickr stream - REALLY nice work!

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  5. dalethorn

    dalethorn Guest

    I like them. At first I thought the tables were too close to the water and the surfer might crash in, then I realized it's a mural(?). So if it could be more obvious it's not a window onto the ocean with a big wave coming in....

    Then again, it's pretty cool as is.

    Edit: If it were possible to remove the white divider it would look incredible.
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  6. SnapDawg

    SnapDawg Rorschach Test Pilot

    Apr 18, 2014
    Canary Islands
    If these were my shots, I'd probably keep the first but delete (ouch) the second. These were my first gut reactions and coming back a day later not that much has changed. So what does that second shot tell you, what does it evoke or remind you of, etc...? Why would you want to keep it in the first place?
    No need to mention you and everybody else are welcome to criticize my shots to your hearts desire.
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  7. KillRamsey

    KillRamsey Super Moderator

    Jun 20, 2012
    Cambridge, MA
    The first does have something to say, the juxtaposition of so much romantic action on the walls, and a mundane light meal happening below it. The second is less clear.

    edit: If you could somehow process it with the can lights standing out really well, like a constellation, and then her form still being visible... not sure if that could be done, or if it would even help.
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  8. Thanks for the input everyone.

    The 2nd image I kinda like purely because the girl is standing still and the sign under her is of a person running. It kinda made me smile. It's a keeper for now but I'll see how I feel in a few weeks.

    Thanks all.